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“Hello everypony, Snogwritts here!

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I recently just finished reading, “Language
Barrier” by Aquaman and I have a lot of

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thoughts about this fic.

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So without further or do, let's get right
to it.”

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“Ok so let's start with the main character,
Dinky hooves, Derpy's lovely little daughter.

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“The fic starts off with a conversation
during lunch, with her fellow friends Sunny

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and Peachy.”

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“Dinky recently heard a so called “Bad
word” and it seems that Dinky is probably

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the only filly who knows it, only to pass
the knowledge to her friends.”

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“You know, Fluttershy should’ve watched
her mouth.

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Or, so they say.”

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“Is peeve really a bad word?

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Because peeve, according to the dictionary,
means to be irritated or annoyed.

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Nothing foul about that.

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You know what?

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I’ll even prove to you by saying it in public.”

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“What?

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You thought I was joking?

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Hah, watch and see”

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“Peeve”

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“See what did I tell you?”

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“Peeve!

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Peeve!

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Peeve!”

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“I’ll even say it again.

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Peeve!”

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“Oh…

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Hehe… hi mom…”

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“Eh..

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The soap was disgusting!

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And don’t even get me started on Ponyville’s
fountain water!

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I’m not doing that again”

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“For a filly to know a word like that most
likely will be passed on to the next.

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But, hey, I don’t blame her, I am a colt
myself and I can relate”

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“I have to say though, I really adore this
writer's style.

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The figurative language here in this fic is
tremendous.

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It gives the story its uniqueness and made
it more enjoyable to read it, so regards to

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the author for that.”

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“The beginning doesn’t take too long either,
I see a lot of writers give a few paragraphs

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on the beginning and if not done correctly,
will result in the reader not getting engaged.

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When somebody reads something make sure by
the first few sentences the reader has a good

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idea what the story is about, they’ll eventually
read more.”

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“The characters act differently from each
other, something I enjoyed about this fic

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as well.

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Dinky acts a certain way while Sunny is the
killjoy, and Peachy um..

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Well..

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That actually leads to a problem.”

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“I kind of wish the author would go more
in depth of the characters personalities.

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Specifically, Peachy, she just seems to be
left to the side of the other characters even

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though she was playing a crucial role in the
story.

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Giving her some more dialog can help.”

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“Overall this fic was excellent and I definitely
enjoyed reading it.

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I suggest the author to make some adjustments
to make it better.”

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“So I’m going to give this fanfic, four
quills out of five”

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“Thanks for watching fellow viewer.

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if you liked it!

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reviews like this one every Sunday!”

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“Alright, that’s it for me, this is Snogwritts,
signing out.”

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Thanks for watching!