“Hello everypony, Snogwritts here!”
“I recently just finished reading, “Patience” By Seventh Heaven, and I do have a lot of
thoughts about this fic.”
“So, without further a do, let’s get right to it.”
“Okay so let’s start with the lovely couple of this fic, Vinyl and Octavia”
“The fic starts off with Vinyl being in a hospital room with Octavia.
The grey mare went into a coma that day, and Vinyl is very worried about her.”
“Wait a minute, Vinyl!?
That same mare that caused my head trauma?!
Oooooh I swear that mare better had paid my hospital bill.”
“Octavia, I got the bow you wanted, Octavia?...”
“Huh, what’s this?”
“Warning, Beware of loud music”
“Huh?”
!
“That music was SO LOUD I couldn’t hear.
My local doctor didn’t believe the cause, but, those sound waves hit my head hard.
Sigh* I swear mares are as dangerous as stallions…”
“Speaking of which, this story has a very unique approach when it comes to it’s plot
line.
Vinyl makes flashbacks while also going to back to the present.
A great addition to the story to tell a bit about his characters, so, regards to the author
for that.”
“Although, the relationship itself does not have a conflict.
Now don’t get me wrong here, there is a conflict in this story, Octavia in a coma
and Vinyls struggles to go through it, but the relationship itself didn’t.
I’m talking about the flashback scenes on how they met and how they started a relationship.
It doesn’t make sense that only knowing Vinyl for a few weeks can she automatically
fall in love with her.
Octavia can’t just fall in love with Vinyl so easily if she just met him a few weeks
ago, especially if there's no problems that can arise in the relationship itself.
Without a conflict, there wouldn’t be much of a natural way of them getting together,
instead, they instantly found happiness together because of, one kiss.
In other words, it just felt forced than natural.”
“Both characters don’t seem to have much depth in them on their feelings for each other.
I find myself scratching my head on the relationship itself.
I suggest the author to go in more detail of the flashbacks and the relationship.”
“The story itself does have some figurative language that can bring depth into this story,
but not enough to bring this story to it’s dedicated genre “Sadmance” as the author
calls it.”
“Overall, I think the story was ok, but it wasn’t great.”
“So I’m going to give this fanfic, 2 quills out of 5.”
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“Alright, that’s it for me, this is Snogwritts, signing out.”
Thanks for watching!