“Hello everypony, Snogwritts here!
I just finished reading “The New World: Peter’s story,” and I do have a lot of
thoughts about this fic.
So, without further or do, let’s get right to it”
“Ok so let’s start with the main character, Peter, a so called, ‘Human’
“The fic starts off with Peter waking up after being frozen for thousands of years
and it seems that he ventures to find a new home for his species.”
“Or should I say, aliens.”
“You know, that reminds me that one time I signed up for journalism.
Long story short, it didn’t go so well.”
“Please hide ANYTHING with sugar, pinkie's sugar rush will scavenge anything with it.
We keep this mare away from our sugar.”
“Breaking news!
There's a two legged creature walking around Ponyville.
If you see him, call authorities immediately!
He has a mustache, cap, and blue overalls.
Please be alert at al-
“Hey look, I found a bit, must be my lucky day.
Wait a minute, this isn’t a bit.
“OW!!”
“I don’t get paid to deal with plumbers, or humans!
Well at least I know where all the others went.”
“But, really, in this story I could really see potential roles here”
“He does have some other friends in this story and I think that adding them later with
another conflict to be accepted into ponyville will be a great addition to this story.
The beginning will start as normal, and as his friends get involved, more conflicts can
make this story even more interesting, although that is just my suggestion.”
“This fic is well written when it comes to a first person story.
It does a decent job simulating that you're the protagonist in this story and connects
yourself to the experiences in the, “new world.”
I like the format of the story myself.
But, there’s a cache.”
“What this fic could use to make it better is figurative language.
Figurative language is a great way to add tone and depth into the story.
Especially for this kind of story, the author can use a lot of it to make the reader really
connect themselves to the story.”
“I like the way the author beginned the story, placing the characters into a situation
at the very start was a brilliant idea.
As the story went on, you see the details of who peter is and how he got here, which
is also a good way to continue a story.
Slowing revealing details.”
“Overall, I think this fic was great, but it was a bit weak on the first person format
so the author could use some more edits on this story.”
“So, I’m going to give this fanfic, three quills out of five”
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Alright that’s it for me this is Snogwritts, signing out”